Here's the intro to my 3 poem compilation that makes up my autobiography of my childhood. Wrote it for Adolescent Literature. I might include the 3 poems sometime, like when I get back my journal.
okay, glad to know it was intentional. this is not word vomit. you thought about this. i can see it. I think it would be interesting if you cut out more the ending. maybe...
this is glimpses of stranger through
gaps
of a passing train-train-train.
to emphasize the brief moments of sight. i really love that visual though. brilliant.
um i love this.
ReplyDeletelove love.
especially the end. brilliant.
don't chicks say "cheep?"
or is this a play on words.
explain.
i'm glad you appreciate it in its simplicity. it's one step above word vomit. but it's MY word vomit, and so i value it.
ReplyDeleteit is a play on words. :)
okay, glad to know it was intentional.
ReplyDeletethis is not word vomit. you thought about this. i can see it.
I think it would be interesting if you cut out more the ending. maybe...
this is
glimpses of
stranger
through
gaps
of a passing train-train-train.
to emphasize the brief moments of sight.
i really love that visual though. brilliant.